Not too shaby at all!
It is certainly clear and concise. I'm usually more gabby in my descriptions...but that usually means I have to go back and cut out a 1000 (or 12.5k in one case) words to shorten it. From an editing stand point Skymtl would probably prefer your writing style
Only real comment is Photos make or break your review. Trust me if you are picked this is the one area which will kick your arse for the first few reviews...might as well start now and learn good habits as opposed to having to UNlearn bad ones first.
All in all Good JOB. Looking forward to seeing your next try!